Ya don't mind reading this, right?

Hey people. i know this site is used for talking about school, learning and all that jazz, but heck, i'm also using this to put up my story. now please don't discriminate me for it, i just wanted to get this thing out in the open. the first chapter is also on the national gallery of writing. but here is my finalized version. http://storywrite.com/story/339696 and i will be using this site from now on too ms. fletcher, so don't worry about my previous problem